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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Looking at the pie charts, a piece of information about
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production
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the production
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 of different types of
energy
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 in France can be observed in 1995 and 2005. What is
noticable
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noticeable
, is that in both years the percentage of
gas
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 and coal
production
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 was the highest and showed quite
the
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a
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 similar pattern.
To begin
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 with, the
gas
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 and coal comparison between 1995 and 2005 gives
an information
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information
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 that more than half of
production
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 was related to these
to
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two
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 kinds of
energy
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 , almost 30% for each.Looking more closely ,it can be seen that
indicator
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the indicator
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 for petro
production
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 was nearly identical to
gas
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 and coal in 1995,
however
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, in 2005 it declined to 19.55%.
In contrast
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, the
perentage
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percentage
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 of nuclear
energy
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 was only 6.4% in 1995,
nevertheless
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, its
production
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 increased to one-tenth of
total
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the total
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 100% in 2005.
In addition
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, there were 4.9% of other types of
energy
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 in 1995,
while
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 in 2005
digits
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the digits
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 rose almost twice.
Overall
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, the pie charts illustrate that regardless of some dramatic changes,
gas
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 and coal
was
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 the leaders of
production
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, energy, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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