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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given provided bar chart illustrates the proportion of world
illiteracy
 rates
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across six regions (Developed Countries, Latin American/Caribbean, East Asian/Oceania, Sub-Saharan Africa,
Arab
States
, and South
Asia
) by gender in the
last
 year. As an
overall
 trend, it can be clearly seen that the total portion of women
illiteracy
 was higher than
man
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 over the period in
world
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. Especially both genders
illiteracy
 accounted most significant size in South
Asia
 and
Arab
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the Arab
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States
,
whereas
 the least amount of
illiteracy
 size in developed countries. The gender gap for
development
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country
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an
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Latin
American
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/
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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 were no
differences
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, despite
other
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were
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huge
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the huge
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 gap between
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 in
illiteracy
. In
term
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 of
male
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males
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 inability to read or write, South
Asia
,
Arab
States
 and Sub-Saharan Africa estimated 30% approximately,
on
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this
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as opposed to
development
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 countries
were
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roughly zero.
However
 male
illiteracy
 rate (less
that
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 10%)
miner
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 than other regions in East
Asia
,
women
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illiteracy
 was only 20%.
On the other hand
, the amount of women
ineducation
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in education
education
 represented the most advanced in Africa,
Arab
States
,
South
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and South
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Asia
48
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%, 53% and 55% respectively
compare
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 to men.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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