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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given provided bar chart illustrates the proportion of world
illiteracy
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 rates
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across six regions (Developed Countries, Latin American/Caribbean, East Asian/Oceania, Sub-Saharan Africa,
Arab
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States
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, and South
Asia
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) by gender in the
last
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 year. As an
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 trend, it can be clearly seen that the total portion of women
illiteracy
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 was higher than
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men
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 over the period in
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. Especially both genders
illiteracy
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 accounted most significant size in South
Asia
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 and
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Arab
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the Arab
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States
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,
whereas
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 the least amount of
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 size in developed countries. The gender gap for
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country
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countries
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an
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Latin
American
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/
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the Caribbean
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 were no
differences
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, despite
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the other
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region
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were
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huge
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the huge
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 gap between
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 in
illiteracy
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. In
term
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 of
male
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males
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 inability to read or write, South
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,
Arab
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States
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 and Sub-Saharan Africa estimated 30% approximately,
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this
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as opposed to
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roughly zero.
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 male
illiteracy
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 rate (less
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than
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 10%)
miner
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 than other regions in East
Asia
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,
women
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illiteracy
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 was only 20%.
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, the amount of women
ineducation
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in education
education
 represented the most advanced in Africa,
Arab
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States
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,
South
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and South
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Asia
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48
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%, 53% and 55% respectively
compare
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 to men.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words illiteracy, arab, states, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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