The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagrams
defines
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define
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of
process
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the process
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how
rain
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rainwater
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water
is
colleted
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collected
and shows the
process
of how it is converted into drinking
water
.
Firstly
, when it rains,the rainwater flows through the drain underneath the houses and
then
it goes through a
water
filter pipe which allows the
water
to be filtered making it clean
water
.
Secondly
, the next step before it goes for
further
treatment, the
water
is stored in a
cube shaped
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cube-shaped
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unit and
than
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then
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moved to pipe in
a
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apply
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another
rectangle shaped
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rectangle-shaped
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unit where
water
fileration
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filtration
takes place.
Thirdly
, In order for rainwater to become drinking
water
, it goes through a
process
of
treatmest
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treatment
where chemicals are added in the
process
to filter the
water
so
its
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it's
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drinkable.
Lastly
, the
water
is sent into the pipe leading into the house pipes, which is
thean
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then
known as drinking
water
.
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