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The charts show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1990, 2000, and 2010. In the pie charts, there were four majors given in those years: Computer science, Medicine, Business, and Law.

The charts show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1990, 2000, and 2010. In the pie charts, there were four majors given in those years: Computer science, Medicine, Business, and Law.
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The three bar charts illustrate the degrees granted in four different fields at
National
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the National
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 University in the years 1990,2000 and 2010 with instruments in percentages.There are four different fields namely
computer
science
, medicine , business and law. As seen from the bar charts,
computer
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the computer
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science
 major has the higher
in
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apply
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percentages compared to
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the others
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others
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other
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 three with a figure of 30% in 1990
then
rise
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rising
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 to 45 % after 10 years.
Next,
in 1990,business
major
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majors
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has
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had
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 a similar starting point as
computer
science
.
However
 , in 2000 ,it
begin
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began
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 to
dropped
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 to 20% rates and ended at 15% in 2010.As for law
major
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majors
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, fewer students take part in
this
 field with 15% since 1990 and
same
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the same
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 figures in 2010.
Finally
,
medicine
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the medicine
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 course started at 25% but after 10 years
this
 number increased to 30% but dropped to 25%
on
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in
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 the next year.
Overall
,many students prefer
computer
science
course
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courses
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instead
 of
law
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a law
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 major.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words computer, science with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • degrees granted
  • majors
  • trends
  • significant increases/decreases
  • stable trends
  • technological advancements
  • job market demand
  • healthcare policies
  • research breakthroughs
  • economic cycles
  • globalization
  • entrepreneurship trends
  • legislation
  • societal issues
  • international policies
  • academic and professional interests
  • implications
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