The line graph below shows the average daily maximum temperatures for Auckland and Christchurch, two cities in New Zealand, and London and Edinburgh, two cities in the United Kingdom.

The line graph below shows the average daily maximum temperatures for Auckland and Christchurch, two cities in New Zealand, and London and Edinburgh, two cities in the United Kingdom.
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The line chart demonstrates the average temperatures in
hottest
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the hottest
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days in two cities in New Zealand,
Auckland
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and
Christchurch
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, and
London
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and
Edinburgh
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city which are located in the United Kingdom.
Overall
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, what stands out from the graph is that climate changes
the
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same in both
Auckland
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and
Christchurch
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, which are exactly
in contrast
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with
London
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and
Edinburgh
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's changing trend. As can be seen, focusing on
Auckland
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and
Christchurch
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,
in
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at
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the beginning of each year and
at the end
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of the year they peak at around 24 and 22
degrees
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Celsius respectively.
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, in July and August they witness a sharp fall, the
counts
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for
Auckland
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is 15 and for
Christchurch
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is around 10
degrees
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.
Also
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evident is,
London
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and
Edinburgh
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start with about 6
degrees
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in January. After which
London
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and
Edinburgh
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soar in July and August,
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, The figures for the former
is
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are
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around 23
degrees
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and for the latter is 17. Another
intresting
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interesting
fact is that for the rest of the
year
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year,
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they both decline significantly to
appromixely
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approximately
7
degrees
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Celsius.
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