The charts below show the percentage of the energy generate from different resources in a country in 1985 and 2003.
The two pie graph compare percentages
about
the amount of energy produced in one nation from some different reserves in 1985 and 2003.
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Overall
, it is notable that oil resource was the highest producer of energy in both years
while
other renewable source
provided the lowest percentages over the Fix the agreement mistake
sources
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two
years
.
Looking at some details, oil generated more electricity in 1985 at 52% whereas
in 2003 the production showed a decrease of 13 %. Another reduction was witnessed by the
Nuclear production since its percentage suffered a decline from 22% to 17%. Correct article usage
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On the other hand
, Coal and Natural gas experienced a slight rise of 5% and 10%, Coal jump
from 8% to 13% Wrong verb form
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Natural gas from 10% to 23%. Finally
, Hydrogen was the element which did not shoed
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