The charts below show the percentage of the energy generate from different resources in a country in 1985 and 2003.

The charts below show the percentage of the energy generate from different resources in a country in 1985 and 2003.
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The two pie graph compare percentages
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the amount of energy produced in one nation from some different reserves in 1985 and 2003.
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, it is notable that oil resource was the highest producer of energy in both
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other renewable
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provided the lowest percentages over the
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years
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. Looking at some details, oil generated more electricity in 1985 at 52%
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in 2003 the production showed a decrease of 13 %. Another reduction was witnessed by
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Nuclear production since its percentage suffered a decline from 22% to 17%.
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, Coal and Natural gas experienced a slight rise of 5% and 10%, Coal
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from 8% to 13%
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Natural gas from 10% to 23%.
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, Hydrogen was the element which did not
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a change in the two
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resource generated 4%
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both
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • energy generation
  • renewable resources
  • non-renewable resources
  • sustainable energy
  • percentage
  • shift
  • decline
  • emergence
  • traditional energy sources
  • comparative analysis
  • speculate
  • advancements
  • environmental concerns
  • adaptation
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