Last week, you visited a local supermarket and you got saticfactory service. Write a letter to the supermarket manager to thank. In your letter: -introduce yourself; -say why you are satisfield; -say thank you and write about your future visits;

Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Khusan Esomurodov and I belong to Uzbekistan. I was born
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in 2006
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2006
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in 2006
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year. I am
businessman
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a businessman
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. At the moment, I am working in the International Tourism field. My age is 18. I am writing
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letter to the supermarket manager to thankfulness.
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, I am telling your very big gratitude. I go to
the
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your shop.
Such
as, there is got me
saticfactory
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satisfactory
service, bring
a
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from
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different meals for me. Especially, fried
fishs
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fish
and roasted meat. Servants are very wonderful, handsome, mildly and extremely outgoing. Foods are exceedingly delicious.
Waters
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are tidy.
Rooms
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are quite beautiful and magnificent. I am expressing
you
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very good thankfulness. Doing
thus
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this
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, it is increasing. I
am desiring
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success
to
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for you, but
also
, I am
supporting
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supporting you
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. In the future, I am visiting
the
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your
cozy
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store. I will eat your famous meals and sweet foods. I have always been a friend, philosopher and guide to you.
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, I am
beeing
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being
friend
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with you. Yours faithfully, Khusan Esamurodov
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It's great that you introduced yourself and expressed satisfaction; however, the introduction could be more concise and relevant to the context of visiting the supermarket. For tasks like this, consider providing directly related information about your visit rather than broad personal details.
coherence cohesion
To improve your coherence, ensure that your ideas flow logically from one to the next. While you’ve structured your letter into paragraphs, some parts seem unrelated or abruptly introduced. Transition phrases can help create a smoother flow between sentences.
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Use specific examples to say why you are satisfied instead of general statements. Mentioning particular aspects of service or products that impressed you will make your appreciation more impactful.
coherence cohesion
End your letter on a note that directly relates to your experience and intention to return. While your closing does this, ensuring it's more connected to the body of your letter will make your conclusion feel more integrated.
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Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and word choice. Using the correct form of words ('satisfied' instead of 'saticfactory,' for instance) and maintaining consistency in tenses will improve the clarity of your message.
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Work on the overall tone of your letter. While it's good to maintain a positive tone, the use of exaggerated praise ('very wonderful, handsome, mildly and extremely outgoing') feels unnatural. Aim for a professional yet friendly tone.

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