It is important for childrento learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? what sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

The understanding and learning of right and good at an early age will guide them to
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To learn these differences we need to educate them on good and bad. And some
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and some may not. Every
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own
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nature and
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process. To guide them, to bring them back
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levels, checks, and
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I know a kid who lives near my house he is seven years old. He gets all these
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punishments
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while
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mentally
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mentally ill and
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for several months.
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well now but he still
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a lot of
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because of the
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a level they should
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the pressure. The UN and WHO
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and kids
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should be under control
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organisation
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standards. If any
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damage
that accuries
due to
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it will change the complete behaviour of that child, It will provide them and us
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neverending problem. Any
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these measurements. We can use the
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complete solution for the problem.
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