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The chart below shows what Antropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows what Antropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The graphs
reveals
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 some information about the employment status of
Antropology
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Anthropology
 graduate
students
 from a university and their salary
according to
 the type of employment after five years. It generally shows that more than half of the
students
 started to work full-time and working in the
government
 sector has more payments
in
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on
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 average. As the pie chart shows, working full-time is the most popular way of occupation among the
students
 which contains 52% of them. With a huge fall, part-time work with 15% of
population
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the population
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 has the second place in working types, which comes before unemployment with
3
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a 3
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percent
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 difference.
Then
, full-time postgraduation studies and unknown
type
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types
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 of occupation have
equal
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an equal
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 population of 8% and the
last
 status is
studing
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studying
 postgraduation alongside a part-time job. The table indicates that working as a freelancer and working
at
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in
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government
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the government
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 sector are more likely to have similar salaries, which has more weight in
government
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the government
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 part.
Then
, the
distrubution
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distribution
 of salaries
are more
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 closer
at
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to
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 private companies, which means
they
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the
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 probability of getting a salary in
range
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the range
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 of 50000 to more than 100000
are
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is
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 approximately similar.
Overall
,the figures show that the
Antropology
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Anthropology
 graduate
students
 are mostly full-time workers and it is financially better for them to work
at
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in
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government
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the government
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 sector.
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