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charts about the comparison of the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. Describe it.

charts about the comparison of the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. Describe it.
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Depicted in the charts are
data
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 about the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The
data
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 was first illustrated in the table, which shows where the money came from, and
then
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 the charts below
it
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show how it was distributed. The sources of money were divided into 3 groups, which were national government, local taxes, and other sources.
Overall
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, it can be observed that the largest contributor
for
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 the police budget was the national government, contributing more than 175m in 2017 and slightly higher in 2018.
On the other hand
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, the smallest contributor went to other sources with 38m in 2017 and 38,5m in 2018.
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, the comparison between the total budget received by the police experienced an increase, where they received a total of 304.7m in 2017 and approximately 318.6m in 2018. Another noteworthy aspect
were
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 the pie charts that
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data
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 about how the money was spent in 2 years. The
data
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 was categorized into 3 groups, which were salaries, technology, and building and transport. In both
year
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, the highest spending went to salaries, and the lowest spending went to technology.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words data, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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