Some people say that its government responsibility to clean the streets other beleive that is your own responsibility Discuss both views and share your experience

The issue about
responsibility
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the responsibility
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to clean a
road
have
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has
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been argued, other people believe
that is
duty
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the duty
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of
government
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the government
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,
while
others say
that is
part of
self-awarness
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self-awareness
. In my point of view, either public
institusions
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institutions
or society itself
have
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has
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their
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its
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own role
to take
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in taking
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care
about
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of
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public facilities including
road
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roads
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.
This
essay will explain about each other duties in cleaning the streets.
Government
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The government
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as a huge institution has
their
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its
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own division that
work
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works
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to ensure all the
road
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roads
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in the city are free from
rubbish
. The reason behind it, because that division has
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been build
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build
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built
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to clean in a bigger scale compared to
individual
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individuals
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.
Moreover
, they have
accsess
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access
to proper
facility
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facilities
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to simplify their job
especially
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, especially
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a
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on a
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road
with
huge
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a huge
the huge
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amount of
littres
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littre
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. In my country, Indonesia, we have several big events,
that
is
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are
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participated by
thousand
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thousands
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of citizens,
for
example
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example,
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carnaval
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carnival
to celebrate
the
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apply
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independance
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independence
day
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, and by the end of the event, the waste
that is
thrown along the way of
carnaval
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carnival
are
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is
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beyound
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beyond
number.
Therefore
,
this
required
government
help that has massive
personils
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personnel
and advanced
tool
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tools
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to clean the
road
.
However
,
Individual
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Individuals
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as a person who
produced
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produce
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their own
rubbish
along their way in the street should pay attention
on
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to
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it. Imagine if every person has high
self-awarness
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self-awareness
to throw their
littre
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litter
to
rubbish
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the rubbish
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bin, it would decrease the work burden of
government
, so
government
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the government
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will just
foccuss
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focus
on cleaning dust or leaves in the
road
that created by nature.
To sum up
,
i
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I
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will say, every person has
own
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their own
his own
her own
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resposibility
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responsibility
to throw away their
littre
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litter
in
proper
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a proper
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rubbish
bin,
while
government
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the government
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will have a job to tackle
a
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apply
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waste
that is
not created by
human
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humans
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such
as dust and leaves or involve to clean massive waste that required big
personils
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personals
and
sofisticated
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sophisticated
technology.
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