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Some people say that its government responsibility to clean the streets other beleive that is your own responsibility Discuss both views and share your experience

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The issue about
responsibility
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the responsibility
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 to clean a
road
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have
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has
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 been argued, other people believe
that is
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duty
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the duty
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 of
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government
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the government
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,
while
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 others say
that is
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 part of
self-awarness
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self-awareness
. In my point of view, either public
institusions
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institutions
 or society itself
have
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has
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their
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its
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 own role
to take
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in taking
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 care
about
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of
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 public facilities including
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road
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roads
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.
This
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 essay will explain about each other duties in cleaning the streets.
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Government
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The government
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 as a huge institution has
their
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its
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 own division that
work
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works
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 to ensure all the
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road
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roads
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 in the city are free from
rubbish
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. The reason behind it, because that division has
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been build
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build
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built
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 to clean in a bigger scale compared to
individual
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individuals
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.
Moreover
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, they have
accsess
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access
 to proper
facility
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facilities
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 to simplify their job
especially
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, especially
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a
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on a
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road
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 with
huge
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a huge
the huge
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 amount of
littres
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littre
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. In my country, Indonesia, we have several big events,
that
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is
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are
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 participated by
thousand
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thousands
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 of citizens,
for
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example
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example,
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carnaval
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carnival
 to celebrate
the
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apply
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independance
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independence
day
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Day
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, and by the end of the event, the waste
that is
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 thrown along the way of
carnaval
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carnival
are
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is
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beyound
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beyond
 number.
Therefore
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,
this
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 required
government
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 help that has massive
personils
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personnel
 and advanced
tool
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tools
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 to clean the
road
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.
However
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,
Individual
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Individuals
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 as a person who
produced
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produce
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 their own
rubbish
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 along their way in the street should pay attention
on
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to
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 it. Imagine if every person has high
self-awarness
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self-awareness
 to throw their
littre
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litter
 to
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rubbish
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the rubbish
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 bin, it would decrease the work burden of
government
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, so
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government
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the government
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 will just
foccuss
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focus
 on cleaning dust or leaves in the
road
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 that created by nature.
To sum up
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,
i
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I
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 will say, every person has
own
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their own
his own
her own
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resposibility
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responsibility
 to throw away their
littre
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litter
 in
proper
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a proper
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rubbish
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 bin,
while
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government
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the government
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 will have a job to tackle
a
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apply
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waste
that is
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 not created by
human
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humans
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such
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 as dust and leaves or involve to clean massive waste that required big
personils
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personals
 and
sofisticated
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sophisticated
 technology.
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coherence cohesion
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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