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The bar graph compares the proportion of local and foreign
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UK computer science university within a three-year period from 2010 to 20012.
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students
throughout the whole period. Use synonyms
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, the highest number of Linking Words
students
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after 2011.
In 2010, the Correct your spelling
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amount
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females
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female
students
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compered
with international Correct your spelling
compared
students
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while
international men and women numbers were under 20. Moving on, by 2011, the Linking Words
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amount
of home females was drastically over the international's Change the quantifier
number
student
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students
Finally
, 2012 was the year the university witnessed the Linking Words
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greatest
amont
of home and international men Correct your spelling
amount
students
, both were over 35. Use synonyms
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, women Linking Words
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at 20 in comparison with local Use synonyms
students
, which reached the highest Use synonyms
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of all the period, at 45.Use synonyms
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