Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behavior. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

part of the society believes that foreigners should obey and adhere to local
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and conduct
while
others believe, that
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should accept other cultural
norms
.In my opinion, adherence to local traditions creates unnecessary stress on foreign
travellers
and makes the visit less enjoyable,
whereas
acceptance of other
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individual practises will lead locals to explore new things and attract
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in other traditions to improve local culture
while
uplifting the
overall
level of tourism in the nation.
Therefore
, in my conviction local citizens should always accept , overseas
travellers
' behaviour and
norms
. To commence,locally developed traditional beliefs can create stressful conditions for foreigners and that can affect the success and the enjoyable nature of the visit.People most of the time schedule their foreign tours to have a free and relaxing time in from their busy
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,and in a host
country
if they have to be under strict traditional
norms
that relaxed mentality would not be with the visitors.
for instance
, in
Soudi
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Saudi
Arabia women are strictly prohibited from loose clothes in some places ,
although
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having a very hot climate outsiders are forced to wear heavy clothing to
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prevent
unessaccery troubles,
while
making the
travellers
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a less enjoyable and stressful situation.
Hence
this
is clearly defined that adherence to strict cultural
norms
in a host
country
can make the trip useless and unenjoyable to the
travellers
.
On the other hand
, if you allow overseas individuals to show and express their normal
behavior
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, locals can learn many from that and
also
outsiders will enjoy their trip a lot. Eventually ,
at the end
of the day, they will love to visit the place again, boosting the foreign revenue.
for example
, in
Singapour
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there are a lot of different cultural restaurants catering for a vast variety of different ethnicities, and
due to
this
practice in most of the other places in the
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they earn a lot from tourism.
Thus
, I believe acceptance of other cultures is very important to the local
country
. In conclusion,
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acceptance of
foreigners
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normal behaviours and traditions will lead to making them under stress during their travel
while
allowing them to express their selves in
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nation will make them happier and appeals to them to come to that
country
again. As
such
,
this
writer has in strong notion that the host
country
should welcome cultural differences.
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