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The table below gives information about the daily cost of water per person in five different countries. (Figures are based on the minimum daily requirement per person of 11.5 litres.

The table below gives information about the daily cost of water per person in five different countries. (Figures are based on the minimum daily requirement per person of 11.5 litres.
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the given table compares the
least
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lowest
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cost
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 of
water
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 per person in five
countries
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, and the average proportion of their
income
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 which is spent on
water
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.
overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
cost
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 of
water
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 in developing
countries
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are
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 much higher than
developed
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in developed
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 ones. To commence, in developing
countries
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, individuals have to
spent
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 more money on
water
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. In Tanzania, the daily
cost
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 of
water
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 for a person is 6.4 dollars, which is 5.7% of their average daily
income
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. The second and the third pricy
water
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 is in Uganda and Pakistan, where a person
have
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 to pay 4.1 and 1.7 dollars for 11.5 litres of
water
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 every day, respectively.
On the other hand
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, in developed
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countries
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countries,
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 the average
cost
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 of
water
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are
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is
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 cheaper than
developing
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in developing
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 ones.
Also
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,
duo
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due
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 to higher
income
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, an individual
pay
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pays
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 much
lesser
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less
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 of his
income
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 for
water
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. In the UK, the price of 11.5 litres of
water
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 is 1.3 USD as just 0.013% of his
income
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.
Similiarly
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, an
american
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pay
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pays
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 0.85 cents of us dollars as the
least
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lowest
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 price among all
countries
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 with a negligible amount of his
income
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.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cost, water, countries, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial burden
  • socio-economic conditions
  • discrepancies
  • access
  • affordable
  • disparities
  • quality of life
  • efficiency
  • effectiveness
  • infrastructure
  • governance
  • accessibility
  • geographic
  • climatic conditions
  • expenses
  • global efforts
  • sustainable
  • water management
  • international cooperation
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