The increase in production and consumption of meat has resulted in the destruction of the natural environment. What is the cause?What can be done to solve the problem?

Over the years the number of
people
who consume
meat
in huge amounts has resulted in the destruction of the natural environment.
People
use
meat
for different purposes, for eating or feeding pets. Mostly they prefer beef, mutton, fish,
chicken
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and chicken
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meat
, and mostly peasants love pork.
Firstly
, the main cause of
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the
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destruction of the natural environment is that
people
consume
meat
very often, and because of
it
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it,
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there is a lack of
meat
in many countries.
Secondly
, there are many regions that have small amounts of edible animals. Other countries have a
lot
of living creatures.
For example
, Azerbaijan has a
lot
of hills and fields, that's why
this
country is rich
with
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in
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its nature. In some
countries
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countries,
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the crowd uses
meat
for meaningless proposals. To solve
this
problem,
people
produce artificial
meat
and sell it
with
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at
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inflated prices. Particularly, It is harmful to our health but there are a
lot
of
people
that don't make sense of it.
Also
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the government can buy
meat
from another country and sell it in their own country, so as not to affect
people
.
This
will help
people
to be healthy and have a
lot
of proteins. It will make
people
stronger. In conclusion, I
ponder
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that every
goverment
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government
should advertise vegetarianism in order to save
the
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apply
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nature and not
to
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apply
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spread unhealthy solutions like artificial
meat
or other proteins.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • intensive farming practices
  • deforestation
  • feed crops
  • resource-intensive
  • environmental degradation
  • antibiotics and hormones
  • pollutes
  • methane emissions
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • global warming
  • plant-based diets
  • sustainable farming practices
  • rotational grazing
  • agroforestry
  • environmental footprint
  • policies and incentives
  • public awareness
  • responsible consumption
  • lab-grown meat
  • alternative protein sources
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