The chart bellow shows the percentage of car trips by purpose and genders in 2015.

The chart bellow shows the percentage of car trips by purpose and genders in 2015.
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The diagram identifies the proportion of car journeys
those
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are used by male and
females
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drivers
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the reason and sex in 2005.
Overall
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, the statistics indicated those the majority of
men
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applied for car trips for work and recreation.
in contrast
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, the
women
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recycled motors for shopping, visiting friends, courses and banks. Look in detail , approximately 52% of autos are used by
men
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for working compared to 38% which are used by
women
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.
In addition
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, the number of
men
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who applied for vehicle recreation is huge for
women
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.
On the other hand
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, more
women
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recycled motors into courses , visited friends, shopped and ran errands compared to
men
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.
However
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,
this
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is a normal result because females are more active in social issues than males
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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