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Some people think that men and women have different qualities. Therefore, some certain jobs are suitable for men and some jobs are suitable for women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 opinion about the difference in
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 of two genders
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 the main factor to decide which works are suitable for a specific gender.
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 writer of
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 with
this
 statement because of the development of human abilities in the
further
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equality
quality
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priored
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prepared
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 prime example,
women
polictician
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politician
politicians
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also
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 the head of the government,
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 job which was used to
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 the man duty. The weaker sex are
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the
breadwinner
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 of
this
 world
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similar
 to men, they can work at every position that they want
due to
 their abilities. Notwithstanding,
women
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 the disruptive behaviour of the old
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people
 thinking. The improvement not only
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 human life
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condition
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it
also
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feeling
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feelings
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 that
women
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Nowadays
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Nowadays
,
woman
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women
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 and man
are having
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 the same qualities, these qualities are
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for
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 different
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 of the society
To conclude
, it can be said that both men and
women
 have been separated with individual qualities facilitating them with abilities to do several tasks. But, by looking at the current norms, it
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 be wrong to think that they cannot do each other’s job.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender roles
  • inherent qualities
  • social dynamics
  • merit-based selection
  • advancements in technology
  • levelled the playing field
  • gender stereotypes
  • equal opportunities
  • physical differences
  • workplace
  • evolving
  • traditional view
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