The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in 

Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and 

make comparisons where relevant.
Looking at the bar chart , a piece of information about
male's
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and female's
involvment
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involvement
in
education
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process in
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Britain
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can be observed. The statistics
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three different time frames and the difference between
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of people who
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preferred
part-time or full-time education.
To begin
with, the fact that full-time education was rarely elected by people in comparison with part-time ,is quite noticeable.
For example
,in 1970/71 1000
thousand
men
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involved in part-time,
whereas
the indicator for full-time was 10 times lower.
In addition
, when it comes to women
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this
year ,it can be seen that their
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was
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were
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even half as much in full-time when compared to men.
However
, to 1990/91
idicators
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indicators
for both
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gender
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show
the
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similar pattern,which riched the top of 200
thousand
. Looking more closely,
chart
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the chart
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demonstrates that the number of male part-timers had a tendency to decline. In 1990/91 their digit was around 900
thousand
,
while
women's interest
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dramatically. From 700
thousand
in 1970/
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71,
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it increased to 1100
thousand
in 1990/91.
Overall
, the chart depicts that involvement in
part-time
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the part-time
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job
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jobs
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was less popular among both genders throughout
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the 20-years
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20-years
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20-year
time frame
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Vocabulary: Replace the words thousand with synonyms.
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