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The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph explains the results of a survey of the mega city of a country in which people shifted
due to
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their
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personal reasons.
Overall
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, education, adventure and peers were seen following
a
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an
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 inclining trend,
while
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emloyment
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employment
 saw a decrease in
total
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the total
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 of adults who shifted to big
city
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cities
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. With regard to
the
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education, starting from early 25k individuals in 2000 and
then
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 increased and reached
at
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just below 50k in 2005 before rising exponentially to just under 90k in the
year
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 2015. In terms of jobs, it followed a rising trend,
adults
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with adults
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 with an initial figure of just above 60k in 2000 and
reached at
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reaching
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 just below 90k in the
year
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 2005. Later, it went through a gradual increase and the eventual figure was 88k in 2015
by
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following a marginal fall.
However
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, humans who moved to
mega cities
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megacities
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 in 2000 were exactly half of 20k and
then
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 it experienced a continuous incline,
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finally
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finally,
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 it just hit just above 20k in 2015. Youngsters who moved for adventure in the
year
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 2000 were nearly 11000,
by
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following a continuous increase, ultimately the number reached
to
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15k in the
year
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 2015.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words k, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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