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The graph below shows the total value of exports and the value of fuel, food and manufactured goods exported by one country from 2000 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the total value of exports and the value of fuel, food and manufactured goods exported by one country from 2000 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph given illustrates the total amount of
goods
 in
million
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millions
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 of
dollars
 and the value of petroleum,
food
 and manufactured
goods
 brought by one nation from 2000 to 2005.
Overall
, there was a reduction in the amount of fuel exported
then
 a sudden increase, whilst the value of manufactured
goods
 was steady throughout,
food
 and fuel had a fluctuation through the years. During 2000, 300000
million
dollars
 was spent on
food
 than a dramatic fall in 2002 to 250000
million
dollars
. From 2002, there was a sharp growth to 350000
million
dollars
 by 2003 and in 2004 had an increase close to 400000
million
dollars
then
 a slight increase to over 400000
million
dollars
 in 2005. The value of
chosen
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the chosen
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goods
 reflects how petrol performed from 2000 to 2005, with a start
if
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of
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 about 48000
million
dollars
 and
then
 a drastic fall to almost 30000
million
dollars
 and 20000
million
dollars
 in 2002 and 2005 respectively.
On the other hand
,
food
 had
fluctation
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fluctuation
 figures starting at almost 20000
million
dollars
then
 a small jump in 2001 to above 20000
million
dollars
,
while
 in 2003 it plummeted to 20000
million
dollars
. By 2003 it recovered a bit rising to just over 20000 again. Manufacturing came
last
 as it was flat the same through the years going below 10000
million
dollars
 from 2000 to 2005
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, million, dollars, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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