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The map below show the changes that acurred to a town named Willington in 1780, 1860 and 2000.

The map below show the changes that acurred to a town named Willington in 1780, 1860 and 2000.
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The furnished structural layouts depict the changes which took place in Willington from 1780 to 2000. From the
overall
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 anatomization, it can be deduced that the Willington town passes through significant
develpoments
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developments
development
 over the period with the introduction of new facilities. Upon initial examination of the chart,it is evident that in1780,
the
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 hundred houses were constructed in the north-east side,
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 a two-fold incline was noticed in the ratio of homes in 1860 and the
quantity
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 of
accomdations
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accommodations
accommodation
 reached
at
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500 till 2000.
Further
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 analysis reveals that the
area
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 of woods
were
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 built to the South direction,
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however
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however,
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 the woody space had
shrinked
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shrunk
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 in 1860. Probing ahead, the two schools and three sports
field
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fields
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 developed in 2000 to the south. Analysing the chart in more detail,in the initial years, a big farm
cultivated
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was cultivated
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 in the middle of the locality, whilst, the
area
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 of green
farm
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farms
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 decreased in 1860. After 1860. the farm
area
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 had vanished. Moving forward, the river
was flowing
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flowed
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 to the east side of Willington, but in 1860, the new bridge
had
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was
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contructed
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constructed
. Henceforward, the shops were opened in 2000
along with
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 river and wetlands
area
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 of birds were grown underneath the river.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • town
  • changes
  • occurred
  • 1780
  • 1860
  • 2000
  • map
  • show
  • named
  • Willington
  • introduction
  • overview
  • comparison
  • conclusion
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