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the chart shows the division of household tasks by gender in great Britain summarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

the chart shows the division of household tasks by gender in great Britain summarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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the bar chart provides data referencing the time and job that males and females spent on household work respectively in great Britain. looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that females contributed a lot more tasks than males in most types of household work. apart from gardening, pet care and maintenance and odd jobs, females worked more particularly in kitchen activities
such
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 as cooking, backing and washing,
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, they spent more time per day as well compared to males.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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