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American film actor John Wayne said: "Tomorrow is the most important thing in life." How is it important for individuals and countries to think about the future rather than the present?

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Lately, a plethora
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 are being seriously talked about among various individuals and groups, and one prominent is present and
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. there are even
people
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 who believe that the most important thing in our life is tomorrow. In the succeeding paragraphs, I am going to discuss the relations between
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future
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 and
present
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the present
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 and give my personal perspective
further
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. The first point to emphasise is that tomorrow
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 opportunities and hopes. It is a common fact that
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have
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 infinite possibilities. To illustrate,
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 expectations
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 as better life or experiences are pivotal
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to
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 working harder
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 individuals and groups, if
people
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 have no
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 for
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future
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the future
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 they
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 be like
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apply
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zombie
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.
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, governments
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 wouldn't efforts to improve our living
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environment
 since they can't see the hops. Another idea worth stressing is that the
behavior
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 in present will impact the result of
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future
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the future
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. The reason is the perspective of
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future
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the future
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is depend
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 on
people
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's
behavior
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 at present.
For instance
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,
government
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 in my hometown
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 to develop
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 economy so many manufactural industries are built up
repidly
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rapidly
, the result is that GDP are gradually
increaseing
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increased
 during
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the past
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 10 years but the natural environment
also
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 disappeared fast since our government didn't have
fully
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 consideration for it may cause the environmental pollution seriously.
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, our
future
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is depend
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 on what
decision
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decisions
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 we make at present. In conclusion,
people
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 need opportunities and hopes to inspire them going forward.
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, one should bear in mind that today is true,
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and tomorrow
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 is
possibility
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a possibility
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.

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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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Achieve a complete response by fully addressing all parts of the task. Make sure your essay clearly discusses the importance of thinking about the future for both individuals and countries, and substantiates the arguments with clear, comprehensive ideas and examples.
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Incorporate more relevant and specific examples that directly support your arguments. These examples should be clearly linked to the point you're making, demonstrating how they illustrate or justify the argument you're presenting.

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