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You took your family to a nearby restaurant. You were disappointed with the meal and wish to complain to the manager. Write a letter to the manager of the restaurant. In the letter: Explain why you were at the restaurant Describe the problems Write about action you want to manager to take

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to complain about your
restaurant
's service, which I experienced awful
last
 weekend when I and my twin Shayla were there on our birthday. As I mentioned we were there on our special day as our friends recommended your
restaurant
 to have
special
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a special
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 supper with
classic
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 music and on fleek garden.
However
, I was very excited to visit your eatery but unfortunately, I had to stand out in a queue for an hour to book a table. And
therefore
, one of the
waiter
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waiters
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 spilt water on my expensive dress. I was absolutely nervous when happened
this
 situation. I purchased
this
 dress for my b-day
that
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apply
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that was my dream.
Although
 your waitress disappointed me. But I said nothing. Cause, I didn't want to injure the
restaurant
.
In addition
, your
restaurant's
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restaurant
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cost
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costs
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 an arm and a leg. In conclusion, I would so appreciate
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it when
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when
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if
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 you see that. Yours faithfully, Bayramoy
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Task Response
To improve task response, ensure that your letter has a clear purpose and directly addresses the points mentioned in the task. Mention what specific action you want the manager to take in response to the problems you've outlined.
Coherence and Cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, try to structure your letter more logically. Each paragraph should deal with a different aspect of your complaint, and you should use linking words to connect ideas more effectively. Avoid jumping from one idea to another without a clear connection.
Task Response
To elevate the writing tone, adopt a more formal language. Avoid using informal expressions and slang ('on fleek,' 'cost an arm and a leg'). Use polite phrases and formal vocabulary to express your dissatisfaction in a respectful manner.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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