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You and your relatives ate a meal at restaurant to celebrate occasion, and you were very pleased with the food and service. • give a details of your visit to the restaurant • explain the reason for the celebration • say what was good about the food and the service

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Dear
sir
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Sir
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 or Madam I am writing to express my satisfaction regarding the delicious
foods
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food
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 we have eaten in your
restaurant
. I am very grateful for
great
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the great
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 services your
restaurant
 provided. We were on the anniversary of my grandfather. My family decided to celebrate it in
restaurant
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the restaurant
a restaurant
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.
Thus
, I sought information about your
restaurant
. After searching I am certain that your
restaurant
 suits my family.
Anniversary
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The anniversary
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 was
special
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a special
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 event that my whole relatives
come
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came
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 to
the
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apply
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celebrating
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celebrate
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.
Thus
, my family wanted to do better than others.
Moreover
, my grandfather's colleagues were coming to the
celebrating
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. So my dad didn't want them to go back without joy. Your
restaurant
 was
best
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the best
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 chance for my family. Services prepared by the waiters of
restaurant
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the restaurant
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 were outstanding. Foods and snakes were unforgettable. Those made me happy and write
this
 letter to you. Thank you for everything
in
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on
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anniversary
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the anniversary
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. Yours sincerely
Humoyun
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Humayun
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task achievement
Ensure to directly address all parts of the task prompt in your response. Detail the specifics of your visit, the celebration, and what made the food and service great.
coherence cohesion
Work on providing a clearer structure to your essay. Use paragraphs to separate different ideas, and make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and supporting sentences.
Language
To enhance the clarity of your essay, pay attention to the accuracy of your grammar and vocabulary. Avoid spelling mistakes and ensure verb tenses are consistent throughout.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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