The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The following bar diagrams showcase different destinations of
gratuated
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graduate
graduated
students
compared to postgraduated
students
after leaving college in 2008. The destinatination of UK graduates in 2008 shows that
further's
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further
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study
is the most common
destination
for both. In the same way, voluntary
work
is the
least
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last
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destination
. It can be seen that the quantities of
students
are in higher levels for graduated than
postgratuaded
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postgraduate
.
For instance
, the
Further
study
destination
got a
leveled
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levelled
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amount. That range of variation is noticed in part-time, voluntary,
further
study
and unemployment variables.
In contrast
, the tendency of data doesn't change for both graphs, respectively the
destination
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destinations
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are
Further
study
, part-time
work
, unemployment and voluntary
work
.
However
, for
postgraduated
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postgraduate
post graduated
students
Add a comma
students,
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the part-time
work
almost
leveled
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levelled
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off
further
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the further
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study
by a difference of 200
students
.
To sum up
, the highest peaks correspond for both
study
factors and the lowest peaks which are similar, are depicted for voluntary 
work
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, study, destination, work with synonyms.

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