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the graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a european country between 1979 and 2004. summarise the infomrations by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

the graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a european country between 1979 and 2004. summarise the infomrations by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant
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The given line graph illustrates the amount of fish and meat eaten by the citizens in a particular nation in Europe during the period from 1979 to 2004.
Overall
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, it can be seen that only the
consumption
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 of chicken showed a growing trend among the selected gourmet items, whilst
lamb
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 and beef experienced a similar degree of decline and fish maintained at about the same level during the mentioned period. Looking more specifically, at the start of the timeframe, beef was the most favourite meat by consumers, followed by
lamb
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, which
were
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was
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 eaten
up
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apply
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by each person at approximately 220
grams
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 and 150
grams
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 respectively per week.
Nevertheless
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, both meat demonstrated quite a drastic decrease in
consumption
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 during the whole time to about 120
grams
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 and 60
grams
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 respectively. For chicken, though it had a similar start to
lamb
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 at about 150
grams
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, it grew consistently in the opposite direction as opposed to
lamb
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 and showed a faster rise after 1999, leading to its first place of
consumption
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 at 250
grams
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 in 2004.
For fish
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Fish
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,
its
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apply
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consumption
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 remained stagnant at the level of about 50
grams
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 and was always the least preferred food during the period.
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