Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative attitude. What are the reasons and suggest some possible solutions?

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These days, there is
an
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widespread phenomenon of
coorperate
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corporate
owners being unsatisfied with their new employee's interpersonal
skills
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. It is claimed that they are incompetent
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in
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communicating with
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colleagues
and following their superior's instructions.
This
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essay will cover the culprits behind
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debated issue and propose some remedial suggestions. To commence with,
employees
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of the new generations might lack
of
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interpersonal
skills
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due to
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the
curriculum
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of their former education.
Hong
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Kong
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's education is well-known for being a spoon-fed education which highly emphasizes academic performance
instead
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of whole-person development, which includes generic
skills
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like interpersonal
skills
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.
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Z spent most of their time in secondary schools or
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working on papers, drilling or learning theoretical knowledge.
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universities do provide
intership
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internship
opportunities, it might not be sufficient for the younger
generation
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to gain enough practical
experiences
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experience
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. With
this
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being said, younger
workers
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might lack
in
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such
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generic
skills
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to cooperate with their
collegue
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colleague
colleagues
to enhance
work
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efficacy, resulting in their
employers
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' or
collegues'
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colleagues'
disappointment.
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Furthermore
, younger generations
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their rights and
work
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-life balance, leading to a less-cooperative mindset compared to experienced
employees
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.
According to
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statistics,
workers
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between the age of 18-30 are less willing to
work
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overtime compared to
workers
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aged between 31-50.
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decades ago,
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Kong
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people
are
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diligent and
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working opportunities
immensively
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immensely
intensively
due to
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the limited job
opportunties
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opportunities
back
then
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.
On the contrary
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,
Hong
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Kong
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young adults now value personal space and mental health and might not be willing to comply
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with
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additional demands proposed by their
employers
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.
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to say,
due to
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generational differences in priorities in life, young
workers
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might not be as obedient as the previous
generation
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. Knowing that there are patent differences between the younger
generation
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and
previous
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the previous
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generation
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in basic interpersonal
skills
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,
coorporate
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corporate
employers
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can bridge the gap by introducing a mentorship scheme
while
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the
edcuational
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educational
curriculum
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can put more emphasis on practical working opportunities to enhance the development of interpersonal
skills
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.
Firstly
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,
cooporate
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corporate
owners can implement a mentorship scheme to equip young
employees
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with the interpersonal
skills
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needed for the job in a step-wise manner. Experienced
employers
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can serve as these young employee's
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mentor
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mentors
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.
To begin
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with, young
employees
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can
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conduct
a shadowing-week to just observe how their
mentor
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communicate
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communicates
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with clients or
collegues
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colleagues
.
Then
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, their
mentor
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could allow them to have some hands-on experience to complete their duty under the supervision of their
mentor
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. Feedback should be given in order to improve new employee's communication
skills
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. With good feedback and hands-on experience, new
employers
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could understand the expectations of their
employers
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and deliver a better performance.
In addition
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to the above, the educational
curriculum
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should be redesigned to include more
project-beased
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project-based
and practical working
opportunity
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opportunities
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to equip the younger
generation
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with the interpersonal
skills
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needed for their future career. For secondary
curriculum
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, schools should include more project-based group
activity
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activities
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that
required
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require
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interpersonal
skills
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, like communication and collaboration
skills
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.
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, students will have more
experiene
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experience
with
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in
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working with people and understanding how to
work
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with different types
personalities
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of personalities
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before they step out of
schol
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school
. As for
univsersity
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university
students, students might not be willing to conduct internships
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the reason that most internships in
Hong
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Kong
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are unpaid. If
cooporates
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corporates
cooperates
are willing to use financial
incetives
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incentives
,
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a student
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student
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students
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could gain more experience in
interactive
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and collaborating with people. With the reasons and solutions above, it is
belived
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believed
that new
employers
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could deliver better
work
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performace
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performance
with improved interpersonal
skills
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.
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