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The line graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the line graph depicts the information about the amount of
prices
 which were changed in
monthly
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the monthly
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 average of
three
 different metals during 2014 after the analysis, it is clearly stated that with regard to
changed
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 in
prices
, the most significant share was of nickel at 6% in
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January
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january
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January
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then
this
 number dropped to 1% after two months the same number rock
botton
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bottom
button
 to
last
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the last
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 point in
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June
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june
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June
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 at about -3% in change after
three
 months, a small dip in was seen and went on increasing
nad
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and
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 remained steadily
moreover
,
intimate
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the intimate
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 pattern was seen in zinc ratio at about 1 % change in
zince
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since
zinc
prices
 in
first
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 month
then
 it started to decreasing and hit
lower
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a lower
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 point in
june
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June
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 and remained steadily for
three
 months and after a small dip it straight on increasing, reaching 2%
furthermore
, a weekly price of
changed
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change
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 was seen in copper of 2 % in
first
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the first
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 month
then
 went on decreasing to
lower
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a lower
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 point and
start
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started
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 to
increased
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increase
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 and
pattern
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the pattern
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move
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moved
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 upward of about 2 %
overall
, it is clearly manifested that fluctuation was seen in all
three
 different metals but nickel was seen a huge drop in
prices
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, three with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dip" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Volatility
  • Trend
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Correlation
  • Economic factors
  • Speculate
  • Significant
  • Overall trend
  • Comparative analysis
  • Increase/decrease
  • Monthly change
  • Price movement
  • Stability/Instability
  • Speculative reasons
  • Global economic indicators
  • Commodities market
  • Month-on-month comparison
  • Year-over-year analysis
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