The charts below show thge percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show thge percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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Water
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the most essential resource supporting the daily needs of all living creatures around the globe. By humans, it is mostly utilised for three main sectors as portrayed in the charts above. These diagrams show how
water
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is spent
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six different continents for industrial, agricultural, and domestic use. One apparent
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from these charts is that for most continents involved here, agriculture is the estuary
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where the
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is spent the most. It is shown by the blue colours that dominate South America, Africa, Central
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and South East
Asia
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. The gap is extremely huge since the other two sectors do not exceed 30% altogether. It is even bigger in Africa, Central
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, and South East
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that the amount of
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used for plantation and fieldwork reaches more than 80%.
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an exception for the two developed continents: North America and Europe. In these two areas,
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is spent mostly for industrial purposes, followed by agriculture and
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domestic purposes. All in all, the amount of
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clear liquid spent by these six territories
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. It is no wonder since each place has distinct geographical characteristics and
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priorities.
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