The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the coment-making process, and how coment is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the coment-making process, and how coment is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
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The diagram shows the preparation of two main products of construction
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Cement
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and Concrete Production, with enumeration of all the necessary equipment.
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, as it is depicted, the creation of
cement
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starts with Crushing limestone and clay,
meanwhile
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the process of concrete production commences with mixing
cement
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and other elements.
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as it was mentioned limestone and clay are crushed by crusher,
subsequently
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the powder
that is
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made from that process goes to the mixer to be blended. Afterwards, the substance is
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entered
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the rotating heater where it is
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circulated and heated at the same time.
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, the taken material is
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by a grinder,
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cement
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is ready to be put into the bags.
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the second illustration, it can be noticed that to create the concrete, 15% of
Cement
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must be added alongside 10% of water, 25% of sand
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50% of gravel to the concrete mixer where the substance is swirling. After mixing all the items together,
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result
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the concrete is made.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cement with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • raw materials
  • grinding
  • heating process
  • kilns
  • clinker
  • gypsum
  • machinery
  • crushers
  • grinders
  • rotary kilns
  • ball mills
  • sand
  • gravel
  • versatility
  • civil engineering
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