The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the coment-making process, and how coment is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the coment-making process, and how coment is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
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The
providad
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provided
image illustrates the process of making
cement
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and for
further
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use, producing concrete. The very first materials of
cement
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are limestone and clay.
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, by adding water, sand and gravel to it with specific proportions and after a mixing process, concrete is made.
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, limestone and clay are being put into the crusher, so a
powder
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will be created out of them.
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, the produced
powder
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is
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set into the mixer.
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, the mixed
powder
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is led into the rotating heater which consists of a heating source from one side, through a tube. After that, the processed
powder
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is
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put on the grinder and the final result will be
cement
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which will be put into bags for
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use. For producing concrete,
cement
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, water, sand and gravel are mixed
together with
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the
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percentages of 15%, 10%, 25% and 50% orderly, in a device called
concrete
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a concrete
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mixer.
Then
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, the produced material will be concrete.
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, for producing
cement
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, limestone and clay will be crushed into a
powder
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which will be mixed, heated and
grinded
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ground
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. After that,
with
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being mixed into a concrete mixer with water, sand and gravel, concrete will be produced.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cement, powder with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • raw materials
  • grinding
  • heating process
  • kilns
  • clinker
  • gypsum
  • machinery
  • crushers
  • grinders
  • rotary kilns
  • ball mills
  • sand
  • gravel
  • versatility
  • civil engineering
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