The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the coment-making process, and how coment is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the coment-making process, and how coment is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
The
providad
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provided
image illustrates the process of making
cement
and for
further
use, producing concrete. The very first materials of
cement
are limestone and clay.
Then
, by adding water, sand and gravel to it with specific proportions and after a mixing process, concrete is made.
Firstly
, limestone and clay are being put into the crusher, so a
powder
will be created out of them.
Then
, the produced
powder
is
being
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set into the mixer.
Subsequently
, the mixed
powder
is led into the rotating heater which consists of a heating source from one side, through a tube. After that, the processed
powder
is
being
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put on the grinder and the final result will be
cement
which will be put into bags for
further
use. For producing concrete,
cement
, water, sand and gravel are mixed
together with
the
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percentages of 15%, 10%, 25% and 50% orderly, in a device called
concrete
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mixer.
Then
, the produced material will be concrete.
Overall
, for producing
cement
, limestone and clay will be crushed into a
powder
which will be mixed, heated and
grinded
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. After that,
with
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being mixed into a concrete mixer with water, sand and gravel, concrete will be produced.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • raw materials
  • grinding
  • heating process
  • kilns
  • clinker
  • gypsum
  • machinery
  • crushers
  • grinders
  • rotary kilns
  • ball mills
  • sand
  • gravel
  • versatility
  • civil engineering
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