The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the coment-making process, and how coment is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The

providad

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provided

image illustrates the process of making

cement

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and for

further

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use, producing concrete. The very first materials of

cement

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are limestone and clay.

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, by adding water, sand and gravel to it with specific proportions and after a mixing process, concrete is made.

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, limestone and clay are being put into the crusher, so a

powder

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will be created out of them.

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, the produced

powder

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set into the mixer.

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, the mixed

powder

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is led into the rotating heater which consists of a heating source from one side, through a tube. After that, the processed

powder

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being

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put on the grinder and the final result will be

cement

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which will be put into bags for

further

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use. For producing concrete,

cement

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, water, sand and gravel are mixed

together with

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the

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percentages of 15%, 10%, 25% and 50% orderly, in a device called

concrete

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a concrete

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mixer.

Then

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, the produced material will be concrete.

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, for producing

cement

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, limestone and clay will be crushed into a

powder

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which will be mixed, heated and

grinded

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ground

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. After that,

with

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apply

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being mixed into a concrete mixer with water, sand and gravel, concrete will be produced.

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Feb 23, 2024

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cement, powder with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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195 words

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raw materials
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heating process
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clinker
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grinders
rotary kilns
ball mills
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The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the coment-making process, and how coment is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

You should spend 40 minutes Some people believe that government funding should be used to support the arts, while others think it is better spent on public services. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

education for some people is the key to success, but to others it does not matter, do you agree with this position

In some countries there are more young people choosing to enrol in work-based training instead of attending university. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.