The line graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph indicates the average monthly change in the price of three
metals
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which are Cooper,
Nickel
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and
Zinc
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back to 2014.
Overall
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,
Nickel
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saw a dramatic fall during
this
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year
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,
while
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, Cooper and
Zinc
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maintained almost the same level. In the first half of the
year
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, all of the
metals
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saw a
decrease
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,
whereas
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, in the other half of the
year
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they rose significantly.
According to
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the graph, in the first three
month
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months
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of 2014,
Nickel
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fell dramatically from 6
percent
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per cent
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to 1
percent
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per cent
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.
However
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,
Zinc
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saw both
a
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an
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increase and
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decrease
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a decrease
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respectively. In summer, all three
metals
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saw a remarkable
decrease
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,
while
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, the most
amont
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amount
of reduction was
fot
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for
Nickel
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with
4
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a 4
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percent
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per cent
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decrease
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.
In addition
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, during
may
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May
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and
june
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June
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,
Nickel
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and
Zinc
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fell but Copper remained the same
amont
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amount
. All the
metals
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saw an increase one
year
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after summer.
However
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, during
fall
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the fall
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each of the
metals
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remained
the
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at the
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same level,
while
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they decreased slightly one month later.
Additonally
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Additionally
, during the winter all of the
metals
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rose
noticaably
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noticeably
noticeable
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words metals, nickel, zinc, year, decrease with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Volatility
  • Trend
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Correlation
  • Economic factors
  • Speculate
  • Significant
  • Overall trend
  • Comparative analysis
  • Increase/decrease
  • Monthly change
  • Price movement
  • Stability/Instability
  • Speculative reasons
  • Global economic indicators
  • Commodities market
  • Month-on-month comparison
  • Year-over-year analysis
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