The line graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph indicates the average monthly change in the price of three
metals
which are Cooper,
Nickel
and
Zinc
back to 2014.
Overall
,
Nickel
saw a dramatic fall during
this
year
,
while
, Cooper and
Zinc
maintained almost the same level. In the first half of the
year
, all of the
metals
saw a
decrease
,
whereas
, in the other half of the
year
they rose significantly.
According to
the graph, in the first three
month
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months
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of 2014,
Nickel
fell dramatically from 6
percent
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per cent
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to 1
percent
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per cent
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.
However
,
Zinc
saw both
a
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an
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increase and
decrease
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a decrease
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respectively. In summer, all three
metals
saw a remarkable
decrease
,
while
, the most
amont
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amount
of reduction was
fot
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for
Nickel
with
4
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a 4
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percent
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per cent
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decrease
.
In addition
, during
may
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May
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and
june
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June
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,
Nickel
and
Zinc
fell but Copper remained the same
amont
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amount
. All the
metals
saw an increase one
year
after summer.
However
, during
fall
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the fall
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each of the
metals
remained
the
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at the
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same level,
while
they decreased slightly one month later.
Additonally
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Additionally
, during the winter all of the
metals
rose
noticaably
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noticeably
noticeable
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words metals, nickel, zinc, year, decrease with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Volatility
  • Trend
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Correlation
  • Economic factors
  • Speculate
  • Significant
  • Overall trend
  • Comparative analysis
  • Increase/decrease
  • Monthly change
  • Price movement
  • Stability/Instability
  • Speculative reasons
  • Global economic indicators
  • Commodities market
  • Month-on-month comparison
  • Year-over-year analysis
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