The line graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph indicates the average monthly change in the price of three
metals
which are Cooper, Nickel
and Zinc
back to 2014.
Overall
, Nickel
saw a dramatic fall during this
year
, while
, Cooper and Zinc
maintained almost the same level. In the first half of the year
, all of the metals
saw a decrease
, whereas
, in the other half of the year
they rose significantly.
According to
the graph, in the first three month
of 2014, Change to a plural noun
months
Nickel
fell dramatically from 6 percent
to 1 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
. Change the spelling
per cent
However
, Zinc
saw both a
increase and Change the article
an
decrease
respectively. In summer, all three Correct article usage
a decrease
metals
saw a remarkable decrease
, while
, the most amont
of reduction was Correct your spelling
amount
fot
Correct your spelling
for
Nickel
with 4
Correct article usage
a 4
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
decrease
. In addition
, during may
and Capitalize the word
May
june
, Change the capitalization
June
Nickel
and Zinc
fell but Copper remained the same amont
.
All the Correct your spelling
amount
metals
saw an increase one year
after summer. However
, during fall
each of the Correct article usage
the fall
metals
remained the
same level, Change preposition
at the
while
they decreased slightly one month later. Additonally
, during the winter all of the Correct your spelling
Additionally
metals
rose noticaably
.Correct your spelling
noticeably
noticeable
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