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The bar chart shows the amount of foreign direct investment in India and China from 2014 to 2019.

The bar chart shows the amount of foreign direct investment in India and China from 2014 to 2019.
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The bar graph gives information about
China
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’s and
India
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’s
investment
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 from abroad between 2014 and 2019 measured in billion dollars.
Overall
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, both
India
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 and
China
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 have
fluctuate
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fluctuating
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trend
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trends
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on
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in
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 foreign capital
expanditure
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expenditure
.
China
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has gain
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gained
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 the biggest
earning
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earnings
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on
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in
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 2018 with more than 100 billion dollars.
Moreover
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,
India
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 has the lowest number of
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investment
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investments
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 compared with
China
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. Looking in more detail,
China
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 always
lead
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 foreign capital expenditure compared with
India
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 except
on
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in
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 2015 with slightly different
with
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from
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India
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.
On the other hand
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,
India
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’s foreign
investment
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 has
wide
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a wide
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 gap different
with
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from
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China
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 except
2015
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for 2015
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 and 2016. Both
China
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 and
India
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 have
contrast
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contrasted
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 distinct
in
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apply
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abroad
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investment
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investments
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on
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 2018 and 2014.
Lastly
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,
China
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 has a downturn in gaining
investment
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 from 2014 to 2019. Meanwhile,
India
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 has a stagnant growth
on
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in
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 the same period.
In addition
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,
China
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 and
India
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 have
increase
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increased
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 and
decrease
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decreased
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in
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apply
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the number of foreign direct
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investment
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investments
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during
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from
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 2014 until 2019.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words investment, india, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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