The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
The column chart illustrates the proportion of Australian males and females in diverse age groups who did exercise on a regular basis in the year 2010.
Overall
, in the age category of 25-64 years old, women
were more active than men
in 2010, whereas
, in the 15 to 24-year-old group, the level of physical activity among men
was higher than that of women
. Moreover
, doing exercise was equally popular among elderly males and females in Australia.
In 2010, the percentage of 15 to 24-year-old men
who exercised regularly stood at 52.8%. Furthermore
, the figures for Australian women
who were physically active in the 25 to 34, 35 to 44, and 45 to 54 age groups were higher at 48.9, 52.5, and 53.3, respectively. It can be implied that the least level of activity related to men
in the 35 to 44 year-old group with 39.5%. Finally
, it is worth mentioning that the percentage of doing exercise among 65-year-old men
and women
and over was equal to nearly 47%.Submitted by maryam.nutrition1988 on
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