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ou have arranged to visit a friend in England but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • explain the important event • apologise for the situation • suggest a new arrangement

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Dear John, I wanted to tell you that
unfortunately
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unfortunately,
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 I can’t go to see you in England because we are celebrating an important event at our house. my brother is getting married. and
this
 is one of the very important events in his life, and
for
this
reason
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reason,
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 I must be in a place with him and must help with the affairs of organizing the wedding, ordering a cake, preparing the house for the wedding,
ordering
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and ordering
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 cars for the newlyweds. and since my brother is very busy with his affairs and he is very excited and cannot concentrate on one thing, I have to do a lot in his place and help him And I really wish I could go to the time we agreed upon. I am sorry. At
such
 an important moment, I have to be with my family But if you want, I can
go
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 to you at another time, if you tell me when you have vacation or free time. How about next month
.
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 I just have a vacation from work next month and I would gladly go to meet you. my vacation starts on the 12th of next month and if you agree, I can be in England as early as the 13th at night. I hope you accept my apologies, thanks for understanding
Your
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 sincerely, Jasur.
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Task Achievement
To improve task achievement, ensure you provide a clear and concise explanation of the important event, offer a heartfelt apology for the inconvenience caused, and suggest a detailed and practical new arrangement. Remember to directly address all three bullet points provided in the task.
Coherence & Cohesion
When working on coherence and cohesion, try to start each paragraph with a clear topic sentence, followed by supporting details and a concluding sentence. Keep your ideas clearly divided between paragraphs.
Logical Structure
To achieve a higher score, refine your logical structure by focusing on the flow from one idea to the next. Ensure that each paragraph smoothly transitions to the next through the strategic use of linkers and cohesive devices.
Greeting & Closing
Make your letter more engaging and reader-friendly by enhancing greeting and closing statements. This includes using varied language and a slightly more formal tone, fitting the letter's context.
Single Idea Per Paragraph
To strengthen the single idea per paragraph aspect, develop each paragraph around a single main idea, ensuring that all sentences within that paragraph directly relate to and support that idea.
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