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The table below presents the food consumption per a person weekly in European country in 1992, 2002, and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below presents the food consumption per a person weekly in European country in 1992, 2002, and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The tables
gives
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information
ifromation
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an ifromation
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 of the person ate a
food
 weekly in four types of
food
 in
European
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Europe
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 between 1992 and 2002 and 2012
Overall
. The vegetables and meat were increased others decreased In vegetables were the highest
numper
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number
 of
people
 ate
this
 type of
food
 in 1992 2140 after that 2012 increased to 2190
however
 rose by30
people
 By
meat
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meat,
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 the second highest
numper
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number
 of
people
 that ate
a
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this
 type of
food
 in 1992 was 1148 after that rose rapidly to 1211
however
 in 2012 decreased by 81
people
 On
wheat
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wheat,
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 in 1992 the
people
 were about 837
in addition
 in 2002 rose quickly to 920
people
, in 2012 the
people
 ate increased by57
peolpe
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people
 Bean the
people
 ate 532 that grow radically to 546
people
however
 rose slowly by 4
peoelp
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people
 in 2012 The
people
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number of people
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 who ate cheese were 113 in 1992 meanwhile in 2002 increased rapidly to 125 the
last
 year in 2012 remained
same
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the same
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 in 2002
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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