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68.The charts below show the average temperatures in 12 months in three cities and how many hours of sunshine these cities have in a year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

68.The charts below show the average temperatures in 12 months in three cities and how many hours of sunshine these cities have in a year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The given chart elucidates the occasionally observed temperature of three cities for
an
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a
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 year.
In
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addition
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addition,
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 they noted the presence of sunrays within
hours
Add an article
the hours
an hours
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 time limit.
Following
Correct article usage
The following
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 changes were noticed over two decades from 1949 to 2009. The pivotal point of the chart is the most extreme changes were
noticable
Correct your spelling
noticeable
 in 1950, 1974, 1999 and 2000 as warm,
while
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 the years 1971, 1985,
1989
Correct word choice
and 1989
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 were relatively colder. On the other side, the unmentioned years just fluctuated or maintained pace or normality. The month of January, started
of
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off
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 as
warm
Correct article usage
a warm
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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