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the given drawing gives an idea of how electrical power is generated with

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water

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flow. looking from an

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perspective, the entire method of generating power supplies contains seven different steps. beginning with the

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of the Sun and ending with the generation of electrical supplies for Hospitals and Schools. in the first step, seawater absorbs hot sun rays

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into clouds and they downpour as rain into

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producing high

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electricity power and at the same time the residual

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return to the

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reservoir

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by the force pumped in order to recycle the

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again and

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use.

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, generated electricity is transferred by high Voltage cable on big towers to transformer stations. in

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step, underground cables distribute

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energy to different areas,

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as hospitals, schools, houses and factories. in short, it is a long and expensive process because lots of resources are required.

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