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The bar chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly salary

The bar chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly salary
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 bar chart compares the weekly spending habits of families in an unnamed country 50 years apart, between 1968 and 2018. Food remains the biggest expenditure in both years, though the percentage contribution has risen significantly from 18% in 1968 to 35% in 2018.
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 spending on leisure has drastically increased from 9% in 1968 to 22% in 2018. Interestingly, people in 1968 spent 10% of their total weekly wages on apparel and housing respectively. In 2018, the spending on clothing items
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dropped to 5%, but accommodation costs have almost doubled to 19%. The percentage share of transport has gone up from 7% in 1968 to 14% in 2018. Average weekly expenditure on household items has remained the same in both years. Spending on Fuel and personal goods declined in 2018 to 7% and 4 % respectively.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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