The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population age 65 and above in three countries.

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The table illustrates the proportion of the

population

aged 65 and higher than 65 years old in

Canada

Germany

, and the

in 1988, 2000 and their estimated proportions in 2030.

Overall

, all countries'

the

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elderly populations have increased over time and

its

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it is

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estimated

to become

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more older people in

Canada

Germany

, and the

Germany

had the highest percentage of the elderly

population

compared to its counterparts in 1988 and 2000, and its fraction

set

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to be the highest in 2030. In 1988, the proportion of

population

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aged 65 and older than 65 years old was a fifth in

Germany

, and it increased to a quarter in 2000.

Canada

's and

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's values were just above 15% and just under 15% at the beginning, and

therefore

, they rose to 21% and 15% in 2000 respectively. The percentage of the

population

aged between 65 and older than 65 years old in

Germany

is set to become 30% in 2030, and it will protect its dominancy in the future.

While

Canada

's fraction will increase to just over a quarter, the

's value is estimated to increase to a fifth in 2030.

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The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population age 65 and above in three countries.

Some people say that the music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In many countries, students' concentration in the classroom has decreased. What are the reasons for this? What are some possible solutions?

Nowadays, most countries improve the standard of living through economic development. But some social values are lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of the phenomenon outweigh the disadvantages?

There are serious concerns about the sale and production of genetically modified food. Yet, this is necessary if we are to meet the demands of an increasing world population. What is your opinion on this dilemma?