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Many countries now face an economic downturn, so it is better for each country to focus on its problems rather than helping other countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

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decade
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,
due to
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such
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, nations have incurred a myriad of problems.
Thus
, there is a contention
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 giving a hand to other countries would be front of financial satisfaction of the helper.
Nonetheless
, I do disagree with
this
 idea and the following essay will express my advocacy of supporting my statement. It is universally acknowledged that promotion and surviving nations entail the connection with others. In other
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, countries face diverse problems and the solutions could be found in other countries . To put it differently, a multitude of weather disasters are
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of
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neighbors’
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 inside problems, so some agreements and sending experts could readily resolve them.
For instance
,
lack
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 of experts and high-tech materials
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 to drastic droughts in Iraq, so without importing technology, Iraq could not
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.
On the other hand
, cooperating to provide requirements of the needy does benefit to helper, too.
That is
 the cause of the nations’ effects on each other is unavoidable. Another aspect of the mentioned example is that whirlwinds in
region
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 will be avoided by helping Iraq. Another worldwide example could be
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 pandemic in which all need vaccines. If the vaccine had been exclusive for the discoverers, all efforts would have been in vain by travelling and transporting. In conclusion, the necessity of countries’ connections is comprehensible to politicians, not only politically but
also
 economically. The significant point is that authorities should not indulge in meeting totally others’ needs.
Moreover
, they require a plan to strike a balance between helping and sacrificing.
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Task Achievement and Coherence and Cohesion
Work on the clarity and comprehensiveness of your ideas. Each paragraph should have one main idea that is clearly stated and supported with specific examples or evidence. Avoid overgeneralizations and strive for precision in your argumentation.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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