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In many workplaces, online communication is getting more and more common than meeting face to face. What are the advantages and disadvantages of online communication?

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Effective managers know, how to make the most of their time at work. Minute-by-minute control is the basis of high
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 productivity. Self-management and positivity are the hallmarks of effective leaders. Even in the most difficult
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 they find positive moments. Effective managers focus on several priority areas of work, the success of which largely determines the implementation of everything. The leader must clearly distinguish between the main and the secondary. Effective leaders make effective decisions. To develop them, you need to
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 in yourself a quality called consistency. It lies in the fact that the manager understands in what sequence certain actions need to be performed. The important focal point is the end result, formulated in detail.
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Task Achievement
Your essay does not directly address the prompt about the advantages and disadvantages of online communication compared to face-to-face meetings. It's crucial to read the task carefully and ensure your essay directly responds to what is being asked. Consider restructuring your essay to focus specifically on the advantages and disadvantages of online communication.
Coherence & Cohesion
Organize your essay with a clear introduction that outlines your main points, followed by body paragraphs that discuss each point in detail, and a conclusion that summarizes your overall argument. This structure will help improve the logical flow of your essay.
Task Achievement
Provide clear examples to support your points about the advantages and disadvantages of online communication. This will help make your arguments more convincing and your essay more comprehensive.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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