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Last week you were on a flight to London. Unfortunately, when you got off the plane, you left a bag there. You did not remember about the bag until you got to your hotel. Write a letter to the airline. In your letter explain what has happened describe the bag and its contents say what you would like them to do about this problem

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Dear Mr./Madam I am writing to concern with my problem. It was
last
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 week when I returned
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from
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 my business trip from Moscow to Erevan . It was
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 124 plane at evening 11:45 PM When I
went
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got
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 out
from
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of
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airport
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the airport
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 I
relized
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realized
realised
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i
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I
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forgot
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had left
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 my
bag
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in
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 my plane. I would like to describe my
bag
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 it is a plack ,
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small-size
bag
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 , on its two sides are the red lines, It
hase
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has
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a metalic
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metalic
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metallic
 zip . That
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 for my more
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important
 because it gave me my friend for my birthday and it
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 for me more expensive. In
edditional
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addition
, there a different
kinde
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kinds
 of documents in my
bag
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. I would like to do everything to
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find
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 my
bag
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 and return
to
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it to
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 me. If you can not find it I will write my insurance and I will open
clame
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flame
. I think when you one more time investigate
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 process you will find my
bag
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 . I want to
informe
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inform
 you that I will wait you
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just
five days and
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 I will write my
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insurance
 for of
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claim
. I am looking forward to hearing
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answere
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answer
answered
. Yours faithfully Zohrab Gevorgyan

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Task Achievement
To improve your complete response score, ensure you address all parts of the prompt more explicitly. Start by clearly stating that you were on a flight to London, not just mentioning the flight numbers and cities. Then, more clearly articulate what you want the airline to do besides investigating - do you wish for compensation, a direct return if found, or any specific action?
Coherence and Cohesion
For a better score on coherence and cohesion, focus on organizing your information more logically. Introduce the situation in the first paragraph, describe the bag in a detailed but concise manner in the second paragraph, and in the third, outline your expectations clearly. Use connectors to guide the reader through your narrative more smoothly.
Coherence and Cohesion
Improve your logical structure by creating clear, distinct sections in your letter for explaining the situation, describing the bag and its contents, and stating your desired action from the airline. This will help the reader follow your points more easily.
Coherence and Cohesion
To enhance the greeting and closing of your letter, use 'Dear Sir or Madam' when you're unsure of the recipient's gender, and ensure the closing is appropriately formal, such as 'Yours sincerely' when you don't know the name of the person you are writing to.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unfortunate incident
  • Flight details
  • Distraction
  • Valuable possessions
  • Sentimental value
  • Lost and found procedure
  • Safe return
  • Compensation
  • Assistance
  • Gratitude
  • Follow-up
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