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You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you left some important papers at a hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. - Explain the problem - Say why the documents are important - Suggest a solution

#hotel #home #papers #manager #documents
Dear Sir or Madam, The reason why I am addressing you is to request you help me
to
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find the important
documents
 which I left at the Sultan Hotel, Karshi on 29 January 2024. First of all, I am Asadbek Bozorov. I participated in the meeting which was organized in the conference hall of the hotel on 29 January.
At the end
 of the meeting, suddenly, it had an issue with electricity. Since I had to go
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 meeting, I could not wait for ending of the repair. I packed up my
documents
 and left from hotel. It was dark, so I could not see well.
This
 caused that I left some papers there. In all honesty, the
documents
 are necessary to find because they help me to keep
securely
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 the future position and plans of my company. Please, check your conference hall desk to find my
documents
. If you find my papers, send them to my company's address. I will
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 grateful to you
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 if you find my
documents
. Looking forward to your positive response. Yours faithfully, Asadbek Bozorov
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure your letter starts with a clear purpose and that each paragraph has a distinct point. Your letter does have a logical structure, but you could enhance clarity by more explicitly stating the purpose in the introduction.
Coherence & Cohesion
You've done a good job with the greeting and closing of your letter; however, a more personalized greeting (if you know the manager's name) could make your letter even better.
Coherence & Cohesion
Divide your content more distinctly into paragraphs. Each paragraph should deal with a single idea or part of the task. This structure is present, but making the separations more pronounced could improve your score.
Task Achievement
Address all parts of the task. You've responded to the prompts but could delve deeper into why the documents are important and offer more detailed suggestions for their recovery.
Task Achievement
Your writing tone is mostly suitable. To enhance it, consider more varied and formal vocabulary and phrases for requests and expressions of gratitude.
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