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The given pie charts illustrate the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world between 6 countries which is North America, south America, Europe, Africa, Central Asia, and South East Asia.

The given pie charts illustrate the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world between 6 countries which is North America, south America, Europe, Africa, Central Asia, and South East Asia.
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The pie charts display three different purposes of
water
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 in per cent for six areas spanned across the world.
Overall
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,
water
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 consumption is divided into three usages which are industrial, agricultural, and domestic. Africa, Central
Asia
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, South East
Asia
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, and South
America
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use
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water
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 mostly for agriculture
while
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 North
America
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 and Europe
use
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 it for industry. Most
countries
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 in Africa,
Asia
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, and South
America
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 utilize groundwater for irrigation and watering
the
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plants. The highest
water
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 consumption for plants is 88% in Central
Asia
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, followed by Africa, South East
Asia
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, and South
America
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 which are 84%, 81%, and 71% consecutively.
On the other hand
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, North
America
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 and Europe only
use
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 around 30% of it for farming. Europe,
America
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 and other
countries
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 in North
America
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use
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 around 50% of
water
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 for industry. Industrial
water
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 is a crucial resource for many industries
such
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 as manufacturing, energy resources, chemical processing, and more.
Water
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 is
also
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 essential for factories related to food products and beverages.
In contrast
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, other
countries
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 in the world only
use
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 around 5% to 12% of it for industrial processes. Other uses of
water
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 are for residential areas. Household
water
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 in all
countries
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 varies from 7 to 19 per cent. People
use
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 it for drinking, preparing food, bathing, flushing the toilet, washing clothes and dishes, watering gardens, and many more indoor and outdoor domestic uses.

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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, asia, america, use, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrate
  • percentage
  • purposes
  • areas
  • regions
  • agriculture
  • industrial
  • domestic
  • disparities
  • dominance
  • dependency
  • contrast
  • developed
  • analysis
  • living standards
  • population density
  • geographical
  • climatic conditions
  • sustainable
  • challenges
  • managing
  • resources
  • effectively
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