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You are working for a company. You need to take some time off work and want to ask your manager about this. Questions: 1.Explain why you want to take time off work 2.Give details of the amount of time you need 3.Suggest how your work could be covered while you are away

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you to enquire about taking some time off my
work
. I would be
greatful
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grateful
 if you could allow me some time off my
work
. Because
,
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 today is my mother's birthday. So I need a lot of duration to celebrate her birthday. First of all, I have to book into restaurant
from
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near the beach. Usually, restaurants
always
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 busy in the evening. We are going to try
this
 Italian fish restaurant on the seafront. They do really good food at that place and it is not very expensive either.
Also
, I have to buy a mesmerizing dress for my mommy. Because my mom
worth
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it
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expensive presents.
In addition
 to
this
, I would like to make party cakes for my queen. I suggest if you could give me extra time off my
work
 I will labour out of my
work
 tomorrow. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Po‘latova Parizoda.
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task achievement
Make sure the response is directly relevant to the questions asked, focusing on why time off is needed, the specific period of time for the leave, and suggestions for covering the work in a business context.
coherence cohesion
Structure your letter with clear paragraphs for the introduction, body, and conclusion. Use a range of linking words to help with the structure and flow.
task achievement
Provide specific examples related to the work context, such as how your responsibilities could be managed in your absence, rather than focusing on personal plans.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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