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20.The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features. Write at least 150 words. 20.The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features. Write at least 150 words.

20.The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features. Write at least 150 words. 20.The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features. Write at least 150 words.
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The diagram illustrates information about
process
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the process
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 of
milk
 production manufacturing.            
Overall
, it requires six steps to produce some kind of
milk
products
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product
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. We can see that
process
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the process
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 starts in the grazing and finishes in shops and supermarkets.      
At the first
stage
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stage,
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 cows are grazed for giving
milk
 twice a day.
Next,
this
milk
moved
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is moved
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 into
refrigeration
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a refrigeration
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storag
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storage
 and is
dalivered
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delivered
 to Dairy by
milk
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a milk
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 tanker daily.           In the
Dairy
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Dairy,
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rhe
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the
milk
 goes through several treatments and pasteurizing and
packeging
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packaging
for obtaining
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to obtain
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 cheese, cream, butter and bottles of
milk
.
Finally
,
this
 production is ready to purchase in supermarkets and shops.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words milk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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