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You recently spent a night in a hotel and had to put up with a great deal of noise very early in the morning bacause of a faulty central heating system. The manager promised to contact you regarding compensation but you still haven't heard from him.

#night #hotel #noise #bacause #system #manager #contact #compensation #haven
Dear Sir or Madam, The reason why
l
 am addressing you is that
l
 want to explain how noise is disturbing us .
As well as
, some ways to deal with
this
 issue.
l
 have been living in the hotel that
l
 rented from you for just a week.
However
,
l
 cannot say it is perfect to live here
bacause
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because
 of noisy
condition
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so a faulty central heating system. Not only is
this
 a problem in terms of
had
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having
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 to put up with a great deal of noise very early in the morning . It
also
 takes its toll at night , which disturbs us from our sleep.
As a result
, we are having a hard time.
Along with
 suffering from not
slepping
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sleeping
well. As a solution,
l
 would recommend you
to
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apply
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install
sound - proof
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soundproof
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windows
instead
 of current ones.
This
 would cut the noise coming outside and make the inside more quiet. Yours faithfully, Nishonova Maftuna
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task achievement
To improve your Task Achievement, you should ensure that you directly address the prompt provided. The essay should specifically detail your experience at the hotel, including the issue with the noise due to the faulty central heating system, and the subsequent unfulfilled promise of compensation by the manager. Include a clear explanation of the issue, what you expected to happen (manager's response), and propose a direct request or solution related to the compensation.
coherence cohesion
For better Coherence and Cohesion, organize your essay into clear paragraphs: an introduction, the development of your points (each in its own paragraph), and a conclusion. Use a range of cohesive devices (e.g., linking words, pronouns) to connect ideas within and across paragraphs. Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
coherence cohesion
Ensure your essay has an introduction that clearly states the purpose of your writing, and a conclusion that summarises your main points or gives a final perspective. Avoid introducing new ideas in the conclusion. This will help make your essay more cohesive and give it a logical beginning and end.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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