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You recently spent a night in a hotel and had to put up with a great deal of noise very early in the morning because of a fairly central heating system. The manager promised contact you regarding compensation but you still heard from him. Write a letter to the hotel in the letter. Describe the problem at the hotel. Explain what the manager had said at the time. Say what you wanted the manager to do

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Dear Mr John, The reason why I am addressing you is that,
also
 I think there are a lot of problems
your
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hotel
. I hope you
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 solve
this
issues
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 in the near future. My name is Tom. In my opinion,
this
hotel
extremely
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 uncomfortable for humans because there are many problems at a
hotel
.
For example
,
this
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many rooms do space
heater
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, swimming
pool
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 and
playground
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 for
hotel
 members.
Besides
 that, I think there are very small in the room at
hotel
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.
Furthermore
, many people, come on every time to guest
hotel
. So, I think
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 a
hotel
 should every time open for some humans.
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 as, I come
22:00
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 p.m. from work every night. From one perspective,
this
a
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hotel
 should be
extremely
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 large room swimming pool and playground for a lot of kids and
also
 many people visit your
hotel
. I want
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 for humans and for me. I am looking forward to your answer in the near future. Yours sincerely, Tom Smith.
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coherence cohesion
Make sure to clearly state your purpose in the opening paragraph for better coherence. E.g., 'I am writing to express my dissatisfaction due to...'
coherence cohesion
Organize your letter into clear paragraphs: introduction, description of the issue, what was promised by the manager, and your expectations or requests.
coherence cohesion
Use formal language for complaints and request compensation in a polite manner. Avoid slang and overly simplistic expressions.
task achievement
Make sure your letter directly addresses the task's three points: describing the problem, explaining what the manager said, and stating what you expect as a resolution.
task achievement
To improve your letter, include specific details about the problem (the noise from the heating system) and mention the promise made by the manager for better task achievement.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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